https://docs.google.com/document/d/1bhMGYvEYQxGSB0FgZqxj1L4gk8hpTdMMxZGvkteNEG0/edit?usp=sharing

The above is a link to Chapter one of my "Who is murdering the people on RfM?" story.

As it opens, a made-up persona is the victim.

Is anyone absolutely totally against me killing you off in subsequent chapters? I wouldn't use your RfM name, exactly, but it would be close. I'd be making up all kind stuff, since I don't really know anything about the majority of you.

And then here's chapter two, for you serious masochists:

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1phrE_PGfb1qDzcKcoKOIJmfM6x8AM2vRsEY3CQQnJzI/edit?usp=sharing


Comments, corrections, advice, critiques, put downs, etc. are all welcome.

Well, I'm gonna hit 'Post message' and see if I did this right...

Kill off Lot's Wife, please!










PS: Ineffable Bitch is not Lot's Wife's alternative name no matter how identical the two in fact may be.

This is a questionable reply...ADMINSTRATION..please delete this "Ineffable B*" comment. You need to be careful what you infer sir! Do you often mask insults with humor?

Problem solved!

That is, I confess, the genesis of my alter ego.

Several months ago someone called me an "effing bitch," which, I thought, was pretty close to the mark. But for that poster I am definitely an in-eff-able bitch and will always be such.

"close to the mark" absolutely not close to the mark whatsoever! :) I love it when exmormon women are able to confidently express their opinion in a critical, coherent, and intelligent fashion. Women in the cult have been so suppressed, and it's refreshing to see a woman come out of that unscathed and self-actualized. You are a great example to other women and men! Don't let one man's opinion define you. We all think you're awesome.

Ted Wrote:
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> This is a questionable
> reply...ADMINSTRATION..please delete this
> "Ineffable B*" comment. You need to be careful
> what you infer sir! Do you often mask insults
> with humor?



I, too, was surprised that Admin allowed this post to remain.

We normally pull stuff like that instantly, but after we checked who the poster really was, it seemed OK to leave it up in this case.

CZ

Yes, it was just a joke. I registered Ineffable Bitch as a joke and have used it two or three times, always mentioning that it is I.

Apologies for any confusion I created.

Or is "dame" now a trigger word? I'm not quite *woke* up in this spacetime zone.

I apply to die ;-)

Beat you to it, Tom.

It's okay.

We can get adjoining graves.

I choose to live so skip over me.

I wanna be a suspect, please, then you can do me in later in the book......Do an Agatha Christie plot twist to get rid of me.......

But go ahead and make me one of the helpful witnesses because I know a lot about ElderBirddog.

My end demands to be spectacular. I have earned it dammmit.

Imprisons her on a remote Baltic island, where he's busy at work on a YA novelization of Hamlet as a rom-com. Hamlet's ghost appears, offers to help. Lot's Wife is forced to do the Sparks Notes, and freaks out.



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Watch it, Sparky!

Does the ghost fall in love?

No, but he comes to dinner.

I post our meet ups on the secret Facebook page mostly.


Strangers are welcome.....

Maybe I need to post here more.

Should I?

Am I a suspect?
Haha....I really doubt it.
I think I'd look really guilty carrying a baseball bat.


OH

We are meeting on December 8th....white elephant gift exchange.

If you want the venue, just ask here.

Tutu
KJ

It’s not the Panera Bread in Whittier?

Huh!

I ain't goin' down without a fight!

someone to want to kill off, I think at least.

EOD has very low standards, so it's probably your call.

Standards???

I think she meant "lanyards." Yours are so low you trip over them.

I fear those aren't his lanyards hanging way down there.

Whatever it is it is hard to teach old dogs new trips.

I prefer old lace to arsenic.

elderolddog Wrote:
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> Is anyone absolutely totally against me killing
> you off in subsequent chapters?

As long as I get a "little death" in the affair.

Okay, something petite, like a .22?

No, no. Fictionally kill me this way.

https://www.romancatholicimperialist.com/2014/02/inxs-singer-michael-hutchence-david.html

EOD, you can do with me whatever you like, but know this; I'm partial to spankings first. After that, eh, go ahead.

It'd be an honor just to be mentioned, let alone killed.

LDS and Mohammedism have a lot in common, but not that.

Seemed more appropriate to say than, "You can kill me in the book on one condition: make it splatter!"

Yes, I am fully aware I'm weird and crazy.



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You're welcome.

If only I didn't know you were so gleeful... But thank you!

O.K. After I read your first two chapters and constructively criticize the non-use of the Oxford comma, you may deem me the grammar Nazi and pin the whole shebang on me, in the conservatory, with the candlestick. I will return and report.

Edited to add: Wow, EOD! Raymond Chandler, you are!!! Finished Chapter One and got sucked in. Maybe I can be Bonita's neighbor lady, the non-memorable, minor character who has no speaking lines. That was simple. I copied and pasted (onto Chrome, of course) so I could mark it up with likely and possible changes and corrections. I sincerely believe your commas are the best I've read in a long, long time!



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Everybody says that about my commas!

Listen, I'm just fartin' around here, kinda sorta... If you have the time and interest, I would very much enjoy your critique. My email is public.

Now he'll grow even more insufferable. . .

Read the chapters yesterday. Very fun!

“Human” may die or live, kill or be killed as you see fit, but only after a cocktail party conversation with “Henry Bemis” wherein it’s is concluded that, metaphysically speaking, it’s all one after all.

Kind sir, thank you.

There is a huge problem with your request: I have never understood the Human v. Henry Bemis exchanges. I am a simple man of the soil; I till in the Spring, with hopes of a harvest in the Fall. I seldom look up from the furrows of my life.

Alas...

elderolddog Wrote:
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> I have
> never understood the Human v. Henry Bemis
> exchanges.

Me too. I think I am and then one of them says something that I have to google about and I'm lost.

EOD,

Completed the proof-reading of chapters 1 & 2. As I downloaded the chapters into Google Docs on my laptop and made highlighting marks, I added your email to those files for reviewing. If that didn't work, let me know.

If necessary, I will go thru and type out the highlights into a Yahoo e-mail to send.

What we are willing to go through for our RfM fellows! To quote Judic West and his associates, "Good Times!"

desertwoman, do you have an agent?

If not, I can make us both a pile of (EOD's) money!

I suspect a big ol' honkin' pile o' . . .

PENNIES!

:)

Let's make this public. Kind like the Zombie Bible.

I'll kill off, um, CZ!

EOD,

I'm quite a nit-picker, but please add an 'e' to the end of the word, 'database' where there currently is no 'e', Chapter 2, page 1.

At the rate you and RfM are going, this book will be ready for world-wide publication.

Beginning proof-reading Chapter 3 today.

I suspct thr is somthing wrong with a ky on ldrolddog's kyboard.

He should really stop putting ky on his kyboard.